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The Edwardians by, Vita Sackville-West, describes the rigid social structure of England during the early nineteenth century; focusing on the Edwardian aristocracy. Sebastian is a young duke living a life of luxury and is next in line to inherit the family estate, Chevron during the decline of the Edwardian era, when social class distinctions are slowly becoming less revered; similar to modern social stratification: a more mobile and accepted society.