Can you guys please listen to some of my raps on youtube and give HONEST and helpful feedback?

You sound a little too simplistic. You should add more similes and metaphors and more introspection to songs like Dead Presidents. You should also try using more flows. And you sound strained, so a little more confidence can help. If you want to be a rapper, you need to kind of have fun with the lyrics and implement wordplay. That makes crowds go loud.